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Shane Bzdok's avatar

Dang, man. A first short of many to come, I hope! This was fantastic—dark and creepy. Loved it.

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J.J. Walker's avatar

Thanks so much, Shane!

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Troy Church's avatar

Great story and nicely written.

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Marilyne Lino's avatar

I finally got around to reading it. I liked it. Great idea and nicely told.

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J.J. Walker's avatar

Really appreciate you checking it out!

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Polly Mordant's avatar

Carried me along. Good job.

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Tabitha Pearson's avatar

Hi there! Really nice prose. There were a couple parts I had questions about. Overall, it was a fun read.

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June Dennis's avatar

Wow 😮 I need more!!!

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S M Garratt's avatar

I'm not a horror guy, but I liked this a lot. Creepy, great twist and just the right side of funny to make me smile... writing that I'm now a little uncomfortable that it did make me smile. Maybe that's wrong... you'll have to come over and read it for yourself, take the chair in the corner, get comfy... switch the light on... you'll be fine.

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Skyla's avatar

The screams are diabolical. Creepy af!!

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Nick Winney's avatar

That's great! really imaginative. had no idea where it was going although the premise is a bit hazy around who Eleanor is... how she's there in the first place. but no matter. its a good piece of writing for sure. great debut here. keep em coming!

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

This has a lot of good stuff going on. I have a few observations but I don’t want to just type them at you without permission. And you’re under no obligation to grant that permission. It’s a fun read.

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Bryan Pirolli's avatar

This was fun! I'm into Rosa turning the lights on, just listening to the screams...

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Angela Marrant's avatar

Well done… but I'm already in the bed 🛌 and now I can't sleep aaaaa :)

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Derek James Kritzberg's avatar

Wow, Rosa is so rude.

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J.J. Walker's avatar

She’s not someone you’d want to be stuck in a basement with.

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Shawn Brooks's avatar

Really liked the twist!

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J.J. Walker's avatar

Glad you enjoyed it!

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